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Seven |
22nd April 2006 - 10:31 pm | |
| Ok, so I'm on my college's book committee, which means we pick out a book all incoming Freshman have to read over the summer and we come up with lots of activities based on the book we choose. I've been put in charge of making the intro to our interactive CD, which has a bunch of study guides and stuff for the students to refer to as they read the book. This is a rough draft of the intro, without a pageloader or button to get to the content or anything. I'd like any critique you can come up with. 500 people are going to be seeing this, so I want it to look as good as possible. Click Here to see it. This is my first real animation in flash. Until now I've only made web templates and stuff in it. Animating is tricky. Also, you might want to read a summary of the book before you look at it. There's a lot of symbolism from the story in the animation. :) Thanks kiddos! |
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| passionaffair | 22nd April 2006 - 11:52 pm | |
| I think it looks really good. | ||
artisticdork |
22nd April 2006 - 11:55 pm | |
| okay first i watched the movie to look at it from an artistic point of view, i like it, you can tell its supposed to be a paper crane, and its done well, its very stylistic, and the flight you have is awesome... except for the begining, i think while its just resting on the grey background with the japannese flag coming in it looks aukward, maybe have it moving just a little bit to give the notion of flying. thats really the only thing i can see besides making alot harder by actually animating the paper crane to look like its wings are flapping and all that goodshtuff. | ||
| Seven |
23rd April 2006 - 01:33 am | |
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Quote artisticdork okay first i watched the movie to look at it from an artistic point of view, i like it, you can tell its supposed to be a paper crane, and its done well, its very stylistic, and the flight you have is awesome... except for the begining, i think while its just resting on the grey background with the japannese flag coming in it looks aukward, maybe have it moving just a little bit to give the notion of flying. thats really the only thing i can see besides making alot harder by actually animating the paper crane to look like its wings are flapping and all that goodshtuff. Thanks for that! Agree, it does look really weird right there. |
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| Seven |
23rd April 2006 - 10:35 pm | |
| Ok, I took Mike's advice and this is what it looks like now: http://holdyourtongue.org/test/emperor.html |
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